Shadows Among Us -- The First Chapter
A peek at the first chapter of a novel's rough draft.
Greetings, Reader!
This is one of my novel projects I’ve been working on, and I’m considering slowly posting bits and pieces of it (or things related) to this publication. While it is in literally the first stages of its existence (I’m not even fully set on the title yet!), I would love to hear some feedback. Is this too long of a chapter? What needs fixing? Based on this first chapter, would you continue reading the book?
I hope you enjoy it!
Chapter I - The New House
Clad in a bright yellow rain coat and squelching gum boots, a small boy stood in the rain before an old pink house. He stared up at it in both curiosity and uncertainty; the porch was like a gaping maw, the fencing and columns serving as old chipped teeth, and dark, dirty windows watched his approach like a cat watches a mouse. It was ominous yet inviting in an eerie sort of way.